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A little girl in tattered lace
who scrapes at her arms
and paints her face
with
a rag doll smile
for a rag doll life
bending backwords
in the failing light

And he's the only one
who noticed.

well, she's so pretty when
she's colored red
on the street corner
playing dead
counting cracks and
imperfections
since the day her life
was not accepted.

And he's the only one
who could make her stay.

Little girl's got
the appropriate words
with "love" scarred upon
her arms.
written with a silver
bladed pen,
a reminder that what's done
is done.

Well, she sits upon her little
bench
to sing a song of war
and in her words was
once a name
for this lovely little
whore.
And he could love her
till his dying day,
to herself she sings,
but that must not have been
enough
just to make him stay.

She sang,
What happens when
the lights are out?
and the dark's been
awake too long,
what happens when this
heat goes out
and every song once sang
is gone.
What happens when a life
is lost
and silent vows are sworn
what happens when the
lights go out
and all thats sewn is torn?
to the boy who claimed he just wanted to make me smile, but could only make me cry.
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:iconjonwassing:
jonwassing Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
Fantastic! i like it a lot!
Brava!
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:iconmrtoadswildride:
Mrtoadswildride Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2005   Writer
thank you :-)
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:iconjonwassing:
jonwassing Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2005  Hobbyist Writer
No problem, the imagery pulled me in...(if i've said this before, i apologize, but imagery really captivates me)
the cracked arms with pen written on them sticks out a lot.
I didn't even notice the subtle ryming until my second read, well done.
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Blazor-rade Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2005   Writer
That's a really nice poem, I shall look around your page..
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:iconmrtoadswildride:
Mrtoadswildride Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2005   Writer
thank you :-) i'm glad you liked it.
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Invisible000 Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2005
wow...that is so sad, but beutiful...i love it...i realy do....


- i could not help but think of sally from nightmare before christmas for some reason....
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:iconmrtoadswildride:
Mrtoadswildride Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2005   Writer
thank you :-),
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Dandarth1 Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2005
I promise I'll come back to you, whether or not you can still believe my promises. I'm still keeping every other one, it's just this one that I have to break. Just don't think the fact that I'm leaving for awhile means I love you any less, because that's the farthest from the truth you can get. I will come back...
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theswarm Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2005
very pretty. I like how the rhyme wasn't glaring. Great story.
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:iconmrtoadswildride:
Mrtoadswildride Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2005   Writer
:-) yeah i usually dont rhyme my poems, but sometimes i get stuck on certain rhythms and i can't write anything that doesn't have at least a small portion like that.
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